I'm trying to heal,
I promise you I am,
But the blade is so tempting,
It haunts my every thought,
The glinting side,
The depressions in my skin,
The urge to draw blood,
It's overwhelming me,
It haunts my thoughts in the day,
And floats through my dreams at night
The sickness I feel after I've cut,
The strange relief that also comes,
That sense of release,
I know it's wrong but it feels so right,
I feel sick, yet relieved,
The conflicting emotions,
Chalk and cheese,
Fire and ice.
Still that shining metal draws me ever closer,
Hold me, it calls, cut into your skin,
Even if I try to resist,
The longing for pain will return,
And yet again,
I'll be back where I once was,
Trying to heal,
I promise you,
But being tempted by the blade,
The blade which haunts my every thought.
thanks.
thank god for gloves...
I've just got a few suggestions, if you want them:
I was a bit confused by the line "chalk and cheese".
The semi-colon after "Hold me" is used incorrectly. Should just be a comma.
Anyway, I really liked it. Well-written and moving.
well, chalk and cheese is often used to describe a huge opposite, just like fire and water- hope that clears things up!!
Oh, okay- i'll change that as soon as possible- thanks for telling me!!